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thanks for letting me know that this chapter was out. i was really looking forward to it. the part about sexual references, thanks for the warning ! overall it was ...

hello there, J.L.A.Montoya, pretty long username, well mine is pretty much the longest, budding writer, call me buddy or budding. by the way welcome to yws. it is pretty intresting ...

hello there, panic, welcome to yws. being a new member myself i know you might panic 'panic'. so, hi ! it would be nice to say a bit more about ...

Prologue The girl ran through the wet ally. Her white-stained-brown track shoes squelched on the ground as she ran. She looked over her shoulder quickly. The man was still chasing ...

This was pretty good, and as a fan of the harry potter series, I like to read this kind of stuff. However, other than the mistakes already pointed out, There ...

it was sooo good. where did you learn to write like that. it was too good. the line which i really like was : Ethereal music floated across the water, ...

hey there, it was amazing but i am not sure the characters would do anything you mantioned back there. my overall saying : alittle not hermoineishbut rons dialogue was very ...

heythere, this is the first time that i am seeing your work cause i am new. i love harry potter and doing this story with the epilogue was brilliant. please ...

That was Rowlingish!! Well done! The writing style was very fine-so much like the books. The story was good too. But I feel that it was a bit vague. I ...

the first thing i would say is yuck ! how could you ? harry potter series is one of the best books and i really hate what you just open. ...

It has potential. The story line was good, and it's left me eagerly awaiting the next installment. My only suggestions are use more description and proof read it a few ...

this was definetely better than the other chapters. looks like you have a hold of things now. ussualy my case is that i do welll in the first chapter and ...

now this chapter was what i think the best. if the chapter is long then te readers get engrossed, and thats what we all read for don't we ? few ...

this chapter was not soo great. although don't stop, keep on writing. we all learn through mistakes right ? the few things i would recomend is that make it a ...

here it flows : - "...And to all those juniors and seniors out there, please be safe this 'break! And responsible. Having a license doesn't make you any older..." exactly ...